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Sunday, May 8, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday

Same WIP. Picking up where we left off...

She expected a shove or a push in return, but to her complete amazement, the stranger looped an arm around her waist and prevented her fall. 
With a cry, she melted into his embrace, thankful just to receive a comforting touch. Her nails bit into his shoulders. Tears seeped into his collar and wet his neck as she struggled for composure against him.
“I’m…so sorry…!” She squeezed her eyes shut in an effort to dam the torrent of tears, but droplets leaked through the corners of her eyes and trickled into her mouth.

19 comments:

Rebecca Royce said...

I was just moved by the line about just relieved to have the comforting touch. Well done.

Carolyn Rosewood said...

Nicely done.

Gayle said...

Aw, really feel for the protagonist. Great description!

Kim Knox said...

aww, great six :)

Zee Monodee said...

Heartwrenching!

Sarah Grimm said...

Nicely done!

Patricia Preston said...

Great writing! Love the description.

AllureVanSanz said...

Thank you for visiting my Six. Checking out yours, I have to admit to being equally intrigued. Great job. I really felt her emotional torment.

All my best,
Allure Van Sanz

Cate Masters said...

Poor girl. Glad he's being nice to her. Nice descriptions.

Taryn Kincaid said...

Such a poignant scene. I love how his comfort makes her lose it!

Maggie James said...

Love your 6...well done!
Sounds like something I'd enjoy reading!!
MAGGIE

Gem Sivad said...

Awww, I felt her pain. And I already like him for holding her while she cries. Great six!

J.A. Beard said...

Poor woman. Glad she isn't getting additionally emotionally stomped on by the passer-by.

Marie Dees said...

very emotional and descriptive. she's certainly having a good cry.

writeintention said...

Wowsa! Love your six this week, especially your description of the crying-"to dam the torrent of tears, but droplets leaked through the corners of her eyes and trickled into her mouth" Love that!!

Charlotte Gatto said...

Very descriptive. I could feel the arm around my waist too!

Laura Kaye said...

I love that I can FEEL how much she needed that comforting touch.

Jayel Kaye said...

What a great 6. Sounds like she needs a lot of comforting

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