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Sunday, May 1, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday

Same WIP as the last two weeks. Different scene. She didn't kill herself. I promise. She was rescued by some dude.



The bewildered stranger just stood there, motionless and tense. He said nothing for a moment but then crouched on one knee to peer into her face. 
“Do I need to call someone…like…a mental hospital or something?” 
The sound of his voice snapped her back into the present, and with an anguished, tear-stained face, she raised her head and looked up into his pale blue eyes. 
“I’m not crazy,” she whispered, more for her benefit than for his, but the man’s expression remained dubious and unconvinced. “I’ve just had a terrible day..." 

17 comments:

Laura Kaye said...

Aw, feel for her! Evocative!

Cate Masters said...

Poor girl! Hope the guy shows some compassion! lol

Carolyn Rosewood said...

I like this!

Susanna Fraser said...

Aww, poor girl, and poor awkward stranger trying to help and putting his foot in his mouth.

Zee Monodee said...

Oh, good to know she didn't kill herself! This man sounds very intriguing now. :)

Sarah Grimm said...

I love his question! Great snippet!

Cara Bristol said...

Nice. Good emotion. I enjoyed it.

Jayel Kaye said...

Oh, I have to remember that line

Rebecca Royce said...

Oh wow. Love it.

Tanya Eby said...

Whenever someone tells me they're not crazy, I think they're crazy. Makes me want to read your book. :)

J.A. Beard said...

'Like a mental hospital or something . . .'

Hehe. Well, at least he's trying to be helpful!

Zenobia Renquist said...

I have definitely had days like this one. I like this snippet.

~ Renee

Jenna McCormick said...

I thought it was just me people thought might be crazy on one of THOSE days. Interesting six!

Lindsay said...

You can feel her anguish

Taryn Kincaid said...

Wondering if "some" dude turns out to be The Dude!

AllureVanSanz said...

Well written. You're obviously quite talented. One of my favorites of today. Well done.

Best,
Allure Van Sanz

Vegetarian Cannibal said...

Taryn, you hit the nail on the head! Thank you for your responses everyone! :D

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