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Same WIP as the last two weeks. Different scene. She didn't kill herself. I promise. She was rescued by some dude.
The bewildered stranger just stood there, motionless and tense. He said nothing for a moment but then crouched on one knee to peer into her face.
“Do I need to call someone…like…a mental hospital or something?”
The sound of his voice snapped her back into the present, and with an anguished, tear-stained face, she raised her head and looked up into his pale blue eyes.
“I’m not crazy,” she whispered, more for her benefit than for his, but the man’s expression remained dubious and unconvinced. “I’ve just had a terrible day..."
17 comments:
Aw, feel for her! Evocative!
Poor girl! Hope the guy shows some compassion! lol
I like this!
Aww, poor girl, and poor awkward stranger trying to help and putting his foot in his mouth.
Oh, good to know she didn't kill herself! This man sounds very intriguing now. :)
I love his question! Great snippet!
Nice. Good emotion. I enjoyed it.
Oh, I have to remember that line
Oh wow. Love it.
Whenever someone tells me they're not crazy, I think they're crazy. Makes me want to read your book. :)
'Like a mental hospital or something . . .'
Hehe. Well, at least he's trying to be helpful!
I have definitely had days like this one. I like this snippet.
~ Renee
I thought it was just me people thought might be crazy on one of THOSE days. Interesting six!
You can feel her anguish
Wondering if "some" dude turns out to be The Dude!
Well written. You're obviously quite talented. One of my favorites of today. Well done.
Best,
Allure Van Sanz
Taryn, you hit the nail on the head! Thank you for your responses everyone! :D
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